When in love…

Posted: December 18, 2014 in flashfiction



The following work of flash fiction is in collaboration with my fellow blogger Jithin of  Pho Trablogger . The picture that you see above ,is his creative photography which inspired this piece of fiction writing . Please click HERE and provide your valuable feedback on this picture.  Also you can check out his blog for more wonderful pictures and travel related posts….I am sure you will enjoy them … (This flash is meant to be continued by another blogger, so i have written it in a way that would ease its continuation… 🙂 )


For sometime, James and Tracy had been riding smoothly home on James’ inherited motor bike. It was the only thing grandpa Thomas left behind and James was treating it like a diamond gem! He was Taking care of every part of the machine even more than the way he took care of  it when grandpa was alive.

“O my!” Tracy screamed, calling James’ attention, “look at that!” She pointed.

James slowed down, turning his head to the direction of her pointed finger, and  then he saw it, the ‘Lucky courage flower!’ The same flower that Tracy gave him in the Range Park Garden the night he asked her to marry him.

That day was tensed and full of doubts for James, “Would she say yes,” He mused, biting his fingers as he collected the ring from the retailer. He had only made up his mind to marry her two days ago and was scared shitless if she should say the dreaded NO, I CANT MARRY YOU JAMES.

“Are you sure you thought this out?” Mark asked, breaking him out of his thoughts limbo, “You know you could always change you mind,”

“I’m not changing my mind buddy, i’ve thought this out, I want her to be my wife!”

“Well, good-luck with that, and thanks for making me you your best-man, i appreciate man, i really do. Got to roll pal, i’d see you tomorrow.”

Mark watched as his best friend mounted the blue bike that was parked beside his grandpa’s motorcycle and zoomed into the horizon. He returned his eyes to the ring in his hand, and gave a quick smile. ‘she would love it.’ he said to himself, ‘I know she would.’

He climbed on his bike, kicked, and zoomed off too, headed home from the ring shop.

His Grandpa was sitting directly opposite the fireplace when he got home.

“Where have you been boy,” Grandpa called out, “Tracy stopped by, please come, lets have a chat.”

James walked up to his Grandfather and sat beside him.

“Is there something you wanna tell me?” Grandpa asked slowly, “Tracy made some complaints, she said you’ve been acting funny these few days, what is the problem?”

James wasn’t sure of what to make of grandpa’s question, and stared at the fireplace, not uttering a word.

“Talk to me boy,”

 “I want to ask her to marry me, and i’m scared she will say no,” He spilled the beans.

“O my! James, that’s nothing to be scared of, follow your heart boy, follow it.”

And with that, Grandpa Thomas stood up and retied to his bedroom.

James continued to stare at the fire for a while, and then, he walked up straight to the telephone and rang Tracy’s home.

“Mrs. Bonson on the line, who is this?” Tracy’s mother asked.

“Its James, can i speak to Tracy,”

“Just a minute…”

The few seconds that passed looked like years to James, ‘Should i abort this?’ He thought.


The voice on the other side of the receiver broke him off his thoughts.

“Hi babe, can we meet in  Range park garden, an hour from now?”

“Wow, we on a date?”

“something like that,” He said. “See you then.”

“Okay, bye.”

He hung up the call and let the breath that had been pilling up in his lungs flow out.

The minutes flew by and in a bit of time he was seated in the reserved spot he booked a day ago, waiting for his girl, Tracy.

His wrist watch ticked 8 pm, she was twenty minutes late, and he was beginning to feel sweaty despite the cold breeze that was flowing through the night. He stood up to leave, giving up on the whole idea, and partly vexed that Tracy stood him up. But as he turned around, there she was, dressed in a crystal white gown that fit perfectly into the garden setting.

James stood, beauty struck, and opening his mouth with no words coming out.

“Hi dear,” She said, “I brought you a gift,”

“Where…” He couldn’t complete his question. Tracy had never looked so beautify in his eyes.

“Here,” she said, packing the carefully cut out yellow flowers she had picked from the flower bed on her way into the garden into his hand.

“Will you marry me?” The question fell off his mouth.

“Of course James, Of course!”

 They were kissing already, forgetting the proposal ring. somehow, the little yellow flowers had given James all the courage he needed.

( Click here to get the link to the complete story from eight great bloggers!)

  1. trablog says:

    Wow!! Beautiful. Those flower became a symbol of love now! Cant wait to see how this is going to develop further 🙂

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  2. sheldonk2014 says:

    A cliff hanger a twist on a love story. Great work

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  3. A satisfactory ending right there…although I can’t wait to hear the rest!

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  4. wow..what a cute love story…and yeah I love the significance you attributed to those yellow flowers… 🙂

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  5. Rose Red says:

    I also like the way you set it up with the Grandfather. Good start to the story

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  6. Samjoth Sashidharan says:

    I am late, but I have started reading the series..!! 🙂
    A good one.. !!! 🙂 loved the simplicity..!!
    n going to the next part right away..!!! 🙂

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  8. Dr. Rex says:

    On another note … thanks for stopping by “It Is What It Is” and the follow. I hope you enjoy your visits there …. peace!! Happy holidays!! 🙂

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  9. I just realized that I have not yet commented on your blog despite we chatted a lot in the comment box. It is really good and must be happy to see the way it is going. Here is my story. http://soulnspiritblog.com/2014/12/19/when-in-love-part-4-a-flash-fiction-chain/

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